you drew that pic too?
drawing has been my meaning of life- so dont troll me about that.
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thats the pic i made
the one on thelast post isnt
Not bad. But here's some recommended improvements to make;
1: Double-space speech lines. You had it almost perfect there, you just need to make it from this;
A: ABC
B: DEF
C: GHI
To this;
A: ABC
B: DEF
C: GHI
This makes it easier to read, and it really does help in the long run.
2: All actions should be enclosed in "*----*" For example;
I shot that guy in the face.
Should be...
*I shot that guy in the face.*
Kind of like that. It makes it easier to identify.
Hopefully, I helped you out on this a bit! :)
thanks!
well it is my first story, so this is very helpfull..
nice!
thanks
awesome! :D
it reminds me of a good book serires i once read except the other way around
humans verses demons but the humans can use magic and the demons had no mind at all
except the demon masters they can speak and *wink wink* play chess :D
and
i loved the story :D its somthing i can easily pick up on
to tell the truth....
....
you should finish the whole series ( or season?) and try to get it published :D
-yay for furries!-
XD that.. would... be.. AWESOME!!
wow..i gotta say that was FAN FUCKING TASTIC!
seriously that was just great for your first story! and the drawing was great too!
i read lots o' books so i learn how to decribe things and how to make little things sound so beautiful...
i thank Cornellia Fuke (my favorate authur) for that.
Looks like I'm gonna have some competition when I become an author. Awesome job you know what its beyond that. Friggin amazing
wow! thanks ^_^; now im a bit embarassed!
i didnt know it would be that good...
Now i see what you ment when you said "Bad"
a simple "i dont like it, sorry" wouldve been good...
but since you gave me adittude, your close to being banned.
thanks for reading... i guess...
I thought it was great!!!
arigatou!~
(thank you!~)
I bet Kirby would say the same thing
hehehe maby :D
A true author is able to visualize ther story and see beyond just the words that are in front of their eyes. that why your story is so amazing
me: wow that was so deep ._.
kirby: can i get my freakin' cupcakes now?!!!
me: crap its that time again...
kirby: yes! now get me my damn cupcakes! PRONTO!
me: *kicks kirby and he goes flying off into the horizon*
me: wow i miss doing that so much :O
*Looks into sky* Why is there a giant brick with a face coming towards us?
oh crap! *uses leviating powers to safely set the brick down*
*the brick forms back into kirby*
kirby: damnit >-<
me: *flame-kicks kirby and kirby goes flying even further*
Awesome! I love it! ^-^ Your stories are even better compared to mine....then again, I think I need a little work on how I type them. So I'll try to do that. Oh! And sorry I was gone so long today. I was VERY busy. ._. And again, wonderful story, my little angel. ^-^
thanks!
i dont think your are better than mine! personally, i think i rush things a bit on my stories...
Also, I've been noticing something odd. Ever since I started my story, everyone else I know is making one. O_o Not that it isn't a bad thing. I just think it's a bit weird in a way.
it is kinda weird :O
but mine is a bit different cus it has nothing to do with NG life :P
True. But still. All the stories have been done mostly just because I've been doing them. I think I'm TOO popular around here. Just like school. >.<
i used to be this kid everbody was friends with, but now that i switched schools, everybody thinks im some weird, emo girl with no friends...
D:< I'll kill those bastards for you then.
*steps back a bit*
erm.... calm down, clash.... ^_^;;
nothing to w-worry about!!
Sorry....it's just that I hate it when anyone picks on you.....
*kisses your cheek*
dont worry ^_^
Okay. ^-^
Also, I noticed something. You're profile pic. One of the shoes has a black collar around the top of it, and the other has a white one. ^-^;
yup :D the white collor one, unlike the black collar one, has a black strip on the shoe, but you can hardly see it in the pic
Sweet Story!!
thanks :D
*Looks into sky as kirby is still flying away* UUHHH Wow nice kick. You play soccer or something cause he's still flyin away
nope :D
i play dodgeball and pingpong :D
Haruken
It's a good game too!
technolife
game? ._.
OHHHH this isnt based off the game